tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-830250818650330713.post1757299612583412092..comments2024-03-02T05:05:32.645-05:00Comments on Sarah Jablonski's Gender and Pop Culture Blog: Male Hegemony within “Secret Life of the American Teenager”SarahJablonskihttp://www.blogger.com/profile/03447110018762239048noreply@blogger.comBlogger3125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-830250818650330713.post-24380346937944540052018-03-24T17:28:56.830-04:002018-03-24T17:28:56.830-04:00Hii Sarah!
Nice Post Sarah!I will say firstly.. K...Hii Sarah!<br /> Nice Post Sarah!I will say firstly.. Keep it up. I am agree with Jassiebg "4. Point B (your point/assertion that supports your thesis that can be directly linked with point A, so that your transition from point A to B is logical and adds depth to your analysis)".In my opinion Sarah you can put image also to better explaination. Please go through "https://www.bestvashikaranmantra.com" this will help you to get your desire one.<br />Astrologerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15339203533872087265noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-830250818650330713.post-17429994647272493202011-07-19T17:48:13.869-04:002011-07-19T17:48:13.869-04:00Sarah-
I'm definitely in agreement with Kevin&...Sarah-<br />I'm definitely in agreement with Kevin's feedback; however, I'd like to see a couple of additional issues addressed.<br />You targeted issues of class, race and ethnicity well; however, the title's use of the phrase "male hegemony" is a bit misleading in a couple of ways. First, you analyzed class, race, and ethnicity more so than gender; therefore, the title should reflect the analysis or the analysis should reflect the title. Second, "male hegemony" is a bit of an ambiguous statement. Therefore, an analysis focusing on a particular character from the show in relation to class as a factor in the depiction of a form of "hegemonic masculinity" (aka what it means to be a "man" is reinforced by this episode of the TV show you chose, based on the character that you chose, as a particular form of masculinity that's dependent on socioeconomic class). <br />The "choppy" structure can probably be rather easily addressed in your paragraph structure. Although this advice may sound a bit formulaic, it should help in future assignments for GPC.<br /><br />The primary issue with your quotes here was that they needed to be introduced and contextualized in a sentence (quotes can't begin and end their own sentences) and formatted in MLA style. <br /><br />The following outline can be used as a reference point (the numbers indicate the paragraph sequence) to structure and order a basic, written analysis:<br />1. Intro Paragraph (with thesis at the last sentence)<br /><br />2. Point A (your first point/assertion that supports your thesis)<br /><br />3. Point A with quote from "expert witness" (author cited through the use of a direct quote to back up your point/assertion made in paragraph 2)<br /><br />4. Point B (your point/assertion that supports your thesis that can be directly linked with point A, so that your transition from point A to B is logical and adds depth to your analysis)<br /><br />5. Point B with quote from "expert witness" (author cited through the use of a direct quote to back up your point/assertion made in paragraph 4)<br /><br />....<br />.... repeat the steps above until your points have been made and you've adequately proven your thesis.<br /><br />#. Conclusion (after all points have been made)<br /><br />For the alpha-numeric grade, see the "gradebook" section of SOCS; however, for the more specific breakdown of points, click on the link for "assessments" to view the "TV Analysis" rubric that was used to calculate the grade you see in the gradebook section. <br /><br />- JessieAnonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00882202558089495129noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-830250818650330713.post-67152307072904219932011-07-16T09:40:50.490-04:002011-07-16T09:40:50.490-04:00Nice post Sarah! Here are some thoughts...
Ways i...Nice post Sarah! Here are some thoughts...<br /><br />Ways in which you excelled:<br />-You do a good job of speaking to audiences both familiar and unfamiliar with the show. I, for one, have never seen the show, and when reading the first transcript from the episode bout the miscarriage, I could not figure out how the interaction had anything to do with socio-economic oppression. However, in your analysis, you introduce the characters well and make your point quite clear. By the end of post, I felt I had a good grasp on what the characters Ben, Adrian, and Amy were all like, and you introduced them without ever losing focus on your thesis, so that was impressive.<br />-You connect the TV show to the week's readings quite well. Ben certainly seems to embody the principles of Lull's definition of hegemony, and identifying Adrian as the "sista with attitude" at the end is spot on. You demonstrate a keen understanding of these readings by being able to contextualize them this way.<br /><br />Ways in which you could have improved:<br />-Your analysis of the hegemonic oppression of lower-class characters is thorough and seemingly accurate, but I did not get a clear idea of what it means to be man or a woman on this show. Rather, I learned what it meant to be wealthy or poor, or white or "ethnic."<br />-A minor error, but some of the punctuation in your excerpts from the show seems incomplete or a little confusing. It was not a terrible issue to work through, but made reading in these sections a little choppy.Kevinhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00879147390661032386noreply@blogger.com